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future..dream
22-01-2008, 03:46 PM
I have written this poem for my Dr. to apologize because we did not well in the the exam that he gave us I want your opinions about it and your notes please....

Forgive us….
On the day of Saturday
We had an exam of poetry
Ready we seemed to be
But we were anxious to see
What will Dr.Kamal give us?
And on which poem will he write''Discuss''?
The last two days were a short time
To memorize: poets,poems or lines
''Why didn't before'' you perhaps say
But believe me we didn't try to delay
For we have 13 subjects
Which made us stressed.

We tried to do our best in study
But we weren't so lucky
For ''Waste Land'' was too long
And we expected he would not bring
I know we must understand
Not every line we have to stand
But not everyone knows what it means
For its movements aren't so clear
Maybe it was our mistake
Which theme we had to take
Maybe it was our guilt
But ''Waste Land'' was too difficult
Even you have done your best
We really want the best
Marks to help us in the future
And now it is your picture
To draw your own decision
And to have your conclusion.Futuredream,A

English Lover
23-01-2008, 02:07 AM
Actully, I haven't experience to say a professional opinion


But in general it's good


I hope Dr.Kamal understand you and repeat the exam



thank you sharing us your nice poem

Abo Lama
23-01-2008, 05:15 AM
future..dream







for sure, your Dr. will accept it :)


thanx alot dear brother


wishing that all of your drems come true

فتنة الروح
23-01-2008, 03:29 PM
very good

I love it

ام بسمه
23-01-2008, 08:40 PM
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Try To Reach
23-01-2008, 10:12 PM
sincere words

and that what it makes it so beautiful

you are a poet sister

go ahead

your feeling are so touchy to wite about

we are waiting for more