YOU Name it!!

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Hi everyone......i wrot these lines when i felt lonely while i have everyone around me...........I want 2 share it with you............hope you like it...
i need your comments plz

...THANKS


Its hurt when you feel neglected..

You are here; near; but there's nobody can sees the pain in your heart

Somebody who takes you a way from your fear

wash your tear;; be your dear

I want my prince now & here!! I Should have my other half;Shouldn't i[/SIZE][/B]

[jimnext]

GOOD TRY DEAR
just keep it up and don't worry about your english
just keep it up

[the smart lady]

great try samt , yr lines are very expressive, keep on trying to improve yr poetic talent

[CHARLES DICKENS]

Well said Silence

May you allow me to correct something dear

It hurts when you feel neglected

You are here; near; but there's nobody can see the pain in your heart

Somebody who takes you a way from your fear

wipe your tear;; be your dear

I want my prince now & here!!
I Should have my other half..
Shouldn't I
!!

I just made little changes , most are grammatical ones
But to be honest with you ...you're reallt gifted...Your nickname tells me that you're wise
You know as well as I know...That's the more you're silent ...the more yo're Wise
(-;

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Jimnext

Thanks alot .... KEEP Smiling

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The smart lady

Thanks 1000 000 ...... Keep smiling

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Charles Dickens

Thanks 1000 000 000

Thanks alot 4 your correction,,, you know what?!! you corrected my lines<i cant say poem>!!with my favourite color!!!
WOOOOW..........Im so thankful 2 you my teacher

[البـارع]

hope you get the purity and familiarity in your life
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great effort , keep writing

[ريما الحسين]

woooooooow how a great words :smile (40)::smile (40)::smile (40):

thanks alot :girl face (192):

[alraad3]

thank you. keep on your great effort

[Aseel]

It's a good start :)


just keep it up and you'll be one of the best


Best Regards

Aseel

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البااااااااااااااااااااارع

Thanks alot ..THANKS for your Support


God bless you ..Ameen

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موضي الحسين

THank you sister for your

SUPPORT

Keep shining Sweety

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alraad3


THank you so much



FOR your support

God bless you ..Ameen

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Aseel

Thank you so much for supporting Me

YOU ARE THE BEST

God bless you..Ameeeeeen

[cage]

Hi buddy!! writing feeings is a wonderful thing to do..and you are sooo good in eniglish and arabic, i know ya ;)
hope to hear from you soo soon.. take good care

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:girl face (192):




Hiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii.. Sweety

Cage

woooow,,you liked it,dont you?

Thanks 4 passing by,,,i know you are busy!!

wish you the best

[witboy86]

It is amazing

I have just a comment about this line


wash your tear;; be your dear

I think the word of wash is not suitable with tear

it is better to use the word of neglect,which can be use as the meaning of remove

at that time your sense will be greater coz u r playing on words with different meaning

GOOD JOB

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Witboy86



Tanks alot 4 your correction

Keep smiling

[BloumagrieT]

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hi sweety

well done

keep up the good work

I'm sure you'll gain what you wish 4 one day

just keep on practicing and reading alot

with my best regards
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^.^

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SOoOoOSOoO


THANK YOU SWEETY 4 reading & your advice

TOO

[postgraduate]

To me it is such a great romantic topic which is full of true passion and romance go a head ..thanks again...

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To me it is such a great romantic topic which is full of true passion and romance go a head ..thanks again...


postgraduate


Thank you for passing by,,yea smarty its a :smile (40):romantic one!!!


thanks again