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مشاهدة النسخة كاملة : The pain of loss is to much.



abu ghararah
10-12-2009, 07:40 PM
I don't understand,
The pain of loss is to much.
Is that why I can't say sorry,
The pain of loss is to much.
I still love him,
The pain of loss is to much.
He gives me pain,
The pain of loss is to much.
I sense in coming,
The pain of loss is to much.
The pain to me,
From him,
The pain of loss is just to much

fofooo
11-12-2009, 01:27 PM
you have repeated the word pain many times in your poem as a signal of your deep feeling of pain and sorrow
the reader will figure out that yuor deep pain is preventing you or works as an obstacle to elaborate and write more rhe readeras finishing the poem will just feel that your eyes are full of tears and your voice doesn`t help you to talk more and you just have nod your head after uttering the last words in a very sad voice the poem is short but it has many things to convey
thanke for sharing us your writings

M.o_o.N
11-12-2009, 01:54 PM
this poem reminded me of a Nasheed about such a pain.

It can turn your mood in moments.

The Nasheed:::

رَ حـل من هو يـ سـليني
http://www.saudienglish.net/vb/showthread.php?t=60383

Thank you brother :)

N teacher
11-12-2009, 02:04 PM
thanx very much dear
may Allah bless u

abu ghararah
11-12-2009, 11:59 PM
It is the style of idealism to console itself for the loss of something old with the ability to gape at something new.

:lost lady:
12-12-2009, 12:08 AM
what a wonderful poem
Many thanks for sharing us
May Allah bless U