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مشاهدة النسخة كاملة : Tattooed Hooves



aussie
03-05-2010, 12:05 PM
this is a poem by a simple guy

i hope to hear your opinions about it


Tattooed Hooves

The outline of horses' hooves
are tattooed into the drought-baked road
White clay gravel hard, and the echo of the long-past canter
chips the hidden resonance of this seldom used road.

Only the soft sibilance
of rain will free the hoof imprints,
free them to chase echoes of a ride taken
along the rattling throat of drought




your honest opinions are valuable to me

Regards

BloumagrieT
04-05-2010, 11:15 AM
aussie

I'm not an expert but I can sense a beautiful mind

lies within those lines .. A unique way of writing and well composed lines

You chose your words carefully to the extent that I can really see and hear

everything .. I loved totally so keep going

aussie
04-05-2010, 02:48 PM
BloumagrieT thank you for your comment

and if i assumed that this lovely poem is mine i will be then a plagiariser

but as i said up there it is a poem by a simple guy

and i'm not that guy

cheers

sad silence
06-05-2010, 07:18 AM
I find it strange but while reading , Its remind me with the literary lines
may be the rythem is weak but
the content is great I realy enjoy reading it


Many Thanks to you

aussie
08-05-2010, 02:27 PM
sad silence thank you for commenting