The Tawfi dog

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The Tawfi dog
Whenas Tawfi was play in the football, It
See a tasty bone. Tawfi went to burial the bone in the earth, because all dogs do this. It saw maggot, but the maggot does not happy!
Tawfi saw hole in the tree. Maybe can put the bone inside it. awww! It has owl
This a good place. a large pipe. Tawfi put the bone inside the pipe. Tawfi say here can not anyone find it. Suddenly, the water gets out from pipe. The water is dirty .oh, no, it is very dirty
Tawfi left the bone and began play in the football.
Translation:
بينما كان توفي يلعب بالكرة شاهد عظمة شهية.
أراد توفي أن يطمرها في الأرض ، كما تفعل كل الكلاب.
شاهد دودة ،ولكنها لم تكن مسرورة!
توجد هنا فجوة في الشجرة. ربما يمكنني أن أضع العظم في داخلها. أووا! ولكن ، هناك بومة.
حسن، هنا مكان جيد. أنبوب كبير.
خبأ توفي العظمة داخل الأنبوب.
قال توفي هنا على الأقل ، لا يجدها أحد.
ولكن ، فجأة ، تدفقت المياه من خارج الانبوب.
أه ! لا، ما أقذرها.
ترك توفي العظمة جانبا، وأخذ يكمل اللعب بالكرة.

I translated these story and I think I have some errors plz If anyone notice mistake plz tell me because I want to improve myself in English

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Thanks a lot for reading my translated

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The Tawfi dog
While Tawfi was playing football, It
found a tasty bone. Tawfi wanted to bury it in the ground, as all dogs usually do .
First It saw a maggot, but the maggot was looked unhappy!
Then Tawfi found a hole in a tree, and it saied, I can put the bone inside it. awww! there is an owl
OK, this is a good place, it is a large pipe. Tawfi put the bone inside it, and saied here nobody can find it. Suddenly, the water came out from pipe, and it was dirty .oh, no, it is very dirty
Lastly, Tawfi left the bone and continued playing football


this is my attempt

good job smack

GOD bless you

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Thanks a lot my brother abakil for correction my translated and thanks my sister for reading my translated.