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مشاهدة النسخة كاملة : I killed some one



prettyالسبهه
21-09-2010, 06:32 AM
I killed someone

Really I did
What can I do I am afraid
It's happened vastly
I always hate him
The bus driver he scares me
He wasn’t waiting me so I have to walk
In sunny, hot days alone no one with me
I hate him he was yelling and drive speedy
Which make me fall on other girls
And I am still suffering although he was lire
Cause every morning the manager of my school
Punish all bus girls as a noisier and we cannot complain
Because if we did he leave us come to school on feet
I hate him but I did not want to kill him
I just want to threat him to stop bother me
But the knife through out his back
And I left him die in his miserable bus
I am cry and cry
Suddenly I wake up it’s him with his stupid bus waiting me
Oh thanks god he is a live
I wrote this and it’s a true when I was in intermediate school
Every thing was happened excepted the killing
I wait ur comments

abu ghararah
21-09-2010, 08:46 AM
Waaaaooo what a horrible dream
you made me afraid from you
i am afraid it will be true on day
sleep early , wake up early
i think you were lazy student

prettyالسبهه
21-09-2010, 09:52 PM
ha ha ha
abu grarah you should be careful with me
I am not a lazy girl ok. you make me mad
you have to worry
thanks for nice comment

abu ghararah
21-09-2010, 11:41 PM
Sorry, I’m so sorry

Sorry for making you mad
Sorry for everything I said
Sorry, I’m so sorry

Sorry if I disappointed you
Sorry if I hurt you
Sorry for everything
Sorry, I’m so sorry

englishLo0oveR
22-09-2010, 12:37 AM
hey, what is going on here

I see abu ghararh fallen in sorry with u pretty

anyway, I'm really suprised when I saw your writting

you're getting better and petter in english

keep going and I'm waiting for your next topic

thanks

prettyالسبهه
22-09-2010, 01:01 AM
its O.K. abu grarah I will for give you
this time
but actually U make me laugh +

prettyالسبهه
22-09-2010, 01:15 AM
English loooover
do you want to know why he fallen in sorry as you said
you will know that soon by a bomb under your car .<<<Terrorist
laugh I am joking >>> silly
thanks so so much I have high mood after ur lines
+
I'm really suprised when I saw your writting

you're getting better and petter in english

keep going and I'm waiting for your next topic

thanks


thanks to you too

abu ghararah
22-09-2010, 02:16 AM
haa haa ha
what a good topic
be careful about the bomb under his car
if it's happened

i will be your witness

قلم الرصاص
22-09-2010, 10:01 AM
Hello pretty

oh ...this scary dream , what happen pretty...you want kill a bus driver

You are a criminal ..sorry I'm joking

Good writing , thank you so much

♥√•كـ ♫ ـانت ‏هـنا㋡
22-09-2010, 02:56 PM
hhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

this is the first time I laugh here in English Club

I can'tremember when it was last time

Very nice Topic pretty alsabha


you and abu gararah

Really made me laugh


May Allah bless you

^_^

ACME
22-09-2010, 04:46 PM
I wait ur comments
Well , here are my comments on your topic . The idea of the topic is interesting and the title attracts everyone to read the content . I congratulate you and I would like to direct your attention to these minor mistakes . I hope next time you will avoid committing such mistakes .
They are highlighted in a different colour
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I killed someone

Really I did
What can I do I am afraid
It's happened vastly
I always hate him
The bus driver . he scares me
He wasn’t waiting me so I have to walk
In sunny, hot days alone no one with me
I hate him he was yelling and drive speedy
Which make me fall on other girls
And I am still suffering although he was lire
Cause every morning the manager of my school
Punishes all bus girls as a noisier and we cannot complain
Because if we did he leave us come to school on feet
I hate him but I did not want to kill him
I just want to threat him to stop bothering me
But the knife !!!! through out his back
And I left him die in his miserable bus
I am cry and cry
Suddenly I wake up it’s him with his stupid bus waiting for me
Oh thanks god he is a live
I wrote this and it’s a true when I was in intermediate school
Every thing was happened excepted the killing.

rose rani
22-09-2010, 06:09 PM
your writing is better
now

bus driver
for me my bus driver was
so nice
I made him for long time
I was lazy

thank you dear sister for sharing us

prettyالسبهه
23-09-2010, 01:54 AM
i will be your witness

abu grarah you are a good person
now you are out my black lest

prettyالسبهه
23-09-2010, 01:56 AM
Hello pretty

oh ...this scary dream , what happen pretty...you want kill a bus driver

You are a criminal ..sorry I'm joking

Good writing , thank you so much

قلم رصاص
welcome back I missed your comments

prettyالسبهه
23-09-2010, 02:00 AM
The idea of the topic is interesting and the title attracts everyone to read the content . I congratulate you and I would like to direct your attention to these minor mistakes . I hope next time you will avoid committing such mistakes

sirhasan
I felt better after your words
and thanks so much for marking my mistakes
really we need good teacher here like you

prettyالسبهه
23-09-2010, 02:04 AM
this is the first time I laugh here in English Club

I can'tremember when it was last time

Very nice Topic pretty alsabha


you and abu gararah

Really made me laugh

hi sense I am glad for passing by
I glad to make you laugh
and I like ur comment it was true

prettyالسبهه
23-09-2010, 02:09 AM
bus driver
for me my bus driver was
so nice
Rose Rani
I suggest if you want to go anywhere by his bus
then you can say
Yaaaaaaaaaak I want to die
I am joking with u
thanks for passing by
and you should be careful with me+