احتاج مساعدة بكرا اختبار

[العربي المتميز]

بسم الله الرحمن الرحيم
السلام عليكم ورحمة الله
اخواني انا طالب بسنة تحضيرية وعندي بكرا اختبار speaking وكتبت موضوع حول هذا السؤال :
What are problems in your cities and how someone can help؟

اتمنى اخواني حد يتاكد من القواعد وصحة النص واذا شي يحتاج ازالة او تغيير

In my city urban we have a lot of problems such as stealing car, smoking, not caring about education, and another trouble.
At first I will speak about how education important to found a good job for teenagers in future? And why they don't worry about that?
They don't care about school. I think because when a teenager following something gives him fun. For example, play football. Them don't like seems lonely because that them spend most of the time with their friends.
If they not studding and don't have certificate of school never can get good job to gain respect for others.
I met a friend of teenagers and I tried to help him to get better I told him about time management. For example share of day for fun and a part for study.
I hope that help him to change to be an active member to his community and in school.
I told him if you study and take high grade your father will be happy. Finally he promised me he will tell his friend for change to better.

في انتظار التصحيح ، بليز محتاج الليلة

[sea breeze]

وعليكم السلام ورحمة الله وبركاته

In my city, we have many problems such as cars stealing, smoking, lack of interest in education, and other troubles.
At first, I will speak about how the education is important to find a good job for teenagers in future? And why they don't worry about this?
They don't care about school. I think because the teenager is doing something gives him some fun. For example, playing football. They don't like to be alone because they spend most of time with their friends.
If they don’t study and don't have certificate of school, they will never get a good job to gain respect for others.
I met a friend and tried to help him to get better and told him about time management. For example, specifying a part of time for studying and another for fun.

I hope that help him to change for the better and become an active member to his school and community.
I told him if you study and get high grades, your father will be happy. Finally, he promised me he will tell his friends to change for better.

صححته بقدر المستطاع وأتمنى من الأعضاء تصحيح أي خطأ لم أنتبه له والله الموفق

[العربي المتميز]

مشكور يالغالي ، الحمد لله انا سهران بس انتظر تصحيح لاكن ع الاقل حصلته ، الله يجزيك كل خير خيو ، بتوكل وباخذ هذا

i hope gat good grade