please...cry

Dear saudienglish members I wrote a new poem and I need your opinions and you comments. I will be grateful for you.here is the poem:


PLEASE... CRY

Cry my eyes please cry
Maybe tears clean what in here
Strange things I can see
In my world like stars in the sky

Is it true or not
What I have only the word " but"
" but I still have a hope,
In this big world "

"I must have wings" I say to myself
"For what? " it asked me.
" to fly up and high "
I then tried to reply.

Not to make anyone touches me
Or at least try to hurt me
Cry my eyes please cry
If you can't just try

futuredream:smile (97):

Dear Sister / FUTUREDREAM

iTs really really Wonderful poem done by you

I do can see A creative writer in here

poem ful of emotions which many girls have but rarely we found who express it like this

I think when you wrote this poem you were highly interacting to the situation you were in

Grammatical Errors Not found through these line

structure was really tenacious to each other

I congratulate you sister

for the so enchanting poem you wrote

Allah bless ya

T R Y

Really marvellous poem

what a delicate writing you have

I appreciate your writing & talent my dear


please keep it up

bless you

may Allah protect you

really nice poem thank u for sharing us dear

hi

Really beautiful poem ...^^

your sis

honey333

[GLINT]excellent my sister

your poem is wonderful[/GLINT]

FUTUREDREAM

Welcome to the club my dear

Glad to have you here among us

It's a nice poem .. Keep the good work coming

We'll surely enjoy reading for you sweety
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Cry my eyes please cry
If you can't just try

I like the tone right here , I even can sing it
(-:
try not to imagin my voice
!!
Dear FutureDream
I hope you a future full of dreamy melody life as nice as your poem
Regards
Mona Dickens

it is really a great beginning
thanks