please read it

[Doha ya Doha]

assalam alaikum every 1i'm a new member here
i need ur comment on my attempts of writing poems..cuz i really wanna publish them...

: here is one

LAW NEEDS PEACE


[CENTER]In all the noise
I spent my voice
That was when
I had no choice

I watch the sky
Return my eye
And see clouds cry
While the land is dry;

Law needs peace
Words without deeds
Blind leads the blind
To catch the shadow
Thinking it is a hero

Soul sent its precept:
''Don’t take every thing you can get"
Around the land
There is a vision
Sometimes is fact
Sometimes is fiction..
[/CENTER]

[امير القلوب]

I really like this poem and it really has many dimensions for every time I read I get more into it and see it from different angles...Keep it up because I believe you are so motivated my friend...I wish you all the best
Prince of Hearts

[Doha ya Doha]

thaaaaaaaaanx alot prince of hearts... really 'm happy 4 ur passing

thanx again

[Aseel]

It's a wonderful, amazing poem, dear


The meaning it beholds is so strong


your words are so powerful


Keep going there

We want you to shower us with more

:)


All the best

[Doha ya Doha]

Thaaaaaaaaaaaaaaanks alot aseel 4 ur words ....they really encourage me....

thaaanx again

thanx shareef for ur gentle passing

[habeeb]

thanks alot its really nice poem.........
keep on
Accept my best regards ,,,,,,,,,,God bless you

[غربة احساس]

thanks alot its really nice poem.........
keep on
Accept my best regards ,,,,,,,,,,God bless you

accept my passing