[QUOTE]That's my train ,
A series of pain
Gas of tears
And smoke like fear[/QUOTE]
Wonderful, dear
You words are so simple , though they're loaded with meanings
Keep it up, dear
Best Wishes
Aseel
DON’T ASK ME WHY
That's my train ,
A series of pain
Gas of tears
And smoke like fear
Leading to fate,
Wont come again
When I can't try
I stop and cry..
I turn around
And say goodbye
I shall die
Don’t ask me why
Hope u like my attempt in writing poems....and i hope 2 b a good beginner
[QUOTE]That's my train ,
A series of pain
Gas of tears
And smoke like fear[/QUOTE]
Wonderful, dear
You words are so simple , though they're loaded with meanings
Keep it up, dear
Best Wishes
Aseel
I really like your way of writing to be honest...yes it's kind of pessimistic, but I believe a lot of the most famous poets had written in this way and for me I think it reflects the emotions and feelings that you had at the time of writing it...keep it up my friend and I really wish you all the best
Prince of hearts
Wonderful poem Doha
Keep it up
I know how you feel when you write simple poem using simple words but it means alot for you
it seems that you are tallented
wish you all the best
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Dear Aseel
thanks a lot 4 ur nice comment..
Dear Prince of Hearts
u really encourage me....thaaaank u soo much
And my friend Fona
Thanks alot 4 passing.. ihope 4 u a brightful future and hope 2 see ur works..
it looks that u will be a good poet
it's so nice poem
keep on
accept my passing
thanx alot toot and ghorbat ihsasa 4 ur passing ...
thanx again
التعديل الأخير تم بواسطة Doha ya Doha ; 28-10-2007 الساعة 03:46 AM
as I told you ,you are a poet.your poem is short but has nice words>.The words are simple but have big meanings.All people know those words but cannt use them as you do .In your mind there is a factory can make nice words.please go ahead and dont stop.On another hand, are you going to buy your train or no?
Thank you
Good luck
Thank u 4 ur nice comment shakespeare i really feel happy when u care about my poems
thanx alot sir
I've read your words and felt your feelings when you were writing them
This is life. None can be happy all the time
Thanks Doha ya Doha
You are my dear Doha
Nice begining, I wish to read more for you
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