Death is everyone's destiny
Hey there,
This is a poem I wrote about death. I would be greatfull if pass on comments on improving it.
Death how greedy can you be?
You separate from those we love,
You feast upon our miseries.
Our tears quench your grief's trust.
Do You take pleasure in bringing us greif?
Or are you merely a faithful solider,
Instructed not to fail but to succeed?
You wave darkness and agony in your hands.
You not only water cheeks with salt tears,
Dripping like blood on the battel field,
You dry their fountains and bury them under sadness.
But from the moment we are shrouded in the tomb
You immortalize out words and deeds in memories.
Yet, you who will weep upon me.
When the soul leaves as gentle as the mountain breeze,
Rejoic and be happy for me.
But if its departure is as painful as burning bees stings.
Pray for my forgiveness .
Impossible is a word to be found only in the dictionary of fools
Death is everyone's destiny
If things do not turn as we wish, we
.should wish for them as they turn out
Very nice......Keep on
Mr.X
good
plz
try to write about love next time
التعديل الأخير تم بواسطة wisam0 ; 29-05-2005 الساعة 11:40 AM
wooooooooow what a great poem
But I have porblem with the vocabulary
But never mind ... I understand a little things
It is very nice... keep on this way friend
ENJOY
Thanks guys for the comments those of you who are having exams I hope that you do well in them. As for love poems I am still working on them but not to forget I need your comments.
Impossible is a word to be found only in the dictionary of fools
thnx my brother for ur excellant poem
we should at least support talaneted ppl like u
by saying thanku or even passing by
hoping one day to read ur novels
على قدر أهل العزم تأتي العزائم
وتأتي على قدر الكريم الكرائـم
;;;
وتكبر في عين الصغير صغارها
وتصغر في عين العظيم العظائم
;;;
im the last one could b ever able to talk about death or love...but i think ur poem s sooo trulllly and has alot ot truth in it sooooo u forget that u read a poem..
so nice
but a piece of advice : try to keep your lines shorter
cause even native speakers find it difficult to compose long lines with regular rhythm
NOTE: grateful NOT greatful
;) :)
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آميــــــــــــــــــــــ ــــن
وكل من يقرأ هذا الدعاء يارب
SPLENDID
KEEP UP
عفوا ......!!
حتى صمت العالم تبدد .......!!
إلا صمتي في كل حين يتجدد .......!!
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