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[Ali 2004]

اخي الكريم .. السلام عليكم

تم إجراء بعض التعديلات في اسلوب القطعة ومفرداتها ..

ولكنها بحاجة للتعديل بواسطة من هو افضل مني في هذا المجال ..

اـمنى ان يقوموا بقية الإخوة بإفادتك ..

تقبل عملي البسيط ..

في امان الله ..

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Eid El Fitr is considered one of the most important occassions in Islam.
It is the day when Muslims break their fast .
In the morning,we go to pray Eid El Fitr Prayer .
We meet each other and shake each other's hands .
After that, we take different ways in order to meet many
people and shake their hands. In this day , I go to visit my relatives and
congratulate them, then I go back home to break my fast by eating something .
In the afternoon , I go with my family for a picnic. We go for some parks and
public places . Finally , we return home overwhelmed by a feeling of happiness.

[MAKSOR_ALWAGDAN]

ابغى مساعدكم في وضع اللمسات النهائية على الواجب ::

اي واحد يعرف اي قاعدة من قواعد الكتابة يعدلها على واجبي ::

الواجب في مادة الكتابة ::هو بلقراف::

الكلام اللي تحته خط ابغى استبدله لانه جاي غلط

Eid ul fitr

Eid ul fitr considered one of the important days in one life .It is the day which Muslims break their fast . In the morning . we go to pray the prayer of Eid ul fitr .We meet each other and clap ead other . after that we return but from another way in order to meet many of people and clap them . in this day , I go to visit my relatives and congratulate them then , I retour to home to eat something to break my fast . afternoon , I go ith my family in a picnic . we go to the gardens and the public places . finally , we return home and we feel happy from this day .

وروانا شطارتكم :)

[BloumagrieT]

ابغى مساعدكم في وضع اللمسات النهائية على الواجب ::

اي واحد يعرف اي قاعدة من قواعد الكتابة يعدلها على واجبي ::

الواجب في مادة الكتابة ::هو بلقراف::

الكلام اللي تحته خط ابغى استبدله لانه جاي غلط

eid ul fitr

eid ul fitr considered one of the important days in one life .it is the day which muslims break their fast . In the morning . We go to pray the prayer of eid ul fitr .we meet each other and shake each other's hands
]. After that we return but from another way in order to meet many of people and clap them . In this day , i go to visit my relatives and congratulate them then , i retour to home to eat something to break my fast . Afternoon , i go ith my family in a picnic . We go to the gardens and the public places . Finally , we return home and we feel happy from this day .

وروانا شطارتكم :)

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