My second Poem

[smack]

MY love2


My love you are star in my sky_ Radiates in the time dispersion darkness
Your eyes have bright spread in my mind_ and your eyes was my way and my life
Your love in my heart Grow and increased and spread in my arterial blood and brain
I don’t know your are person or angel_ in our town don’t available any person equal your beauty
I want to said without any shyness_ you my heart, blood , and my soul and every things in my life


Plz If I have any mistake plz tell me

[hot-meme=girl]

Wallahy i don't know what can i say
but when i read ur 2 poems i felt that as if i read a love letter i don't know
i'm just saying my personal feelings
i don't judge them
but they are sweet words
an' in fact they inspirate me to see these words


look at the sky.....an' wish to fly
then look at my eyes.....i swear that u'll fly

hahaha so confident

hope the best 4 u

[prettyالسبهه]

hi smack
its wonderful
keep witting

but even u talk about ur love u should not have to
lock ur words in describe the love only
I mean u can add some other feeling which fit with ur poem
such admiring , missing , remembering and so on
P.S. that is my won opinion not the literary one
but in

I don’t know your are person or angel_

its you are not your
thats it
and I like it go on smack

[smack]

Wallahy i don't know what can i say
but when i read ur 2 poems i felt that as if i read a love letter i don't know
i'm just saying my personal feelings
i don't judge them
but they are sweet words
an' in fact they inspirate me to see these words


look at the sky.....an' wish to fly
then look at my eyes.....i swear that u'll fly

hahaha so confident

hope the best 4 u

Always your words encourage me to put more in this forum and maybe you are right about love letter, but I want to say these words from my heart.
Thanks a lot for you.

[smack]

hi smack
its wonderful
keep witting

but even u talk about ur love u should not have to
lock ur words in describe the love only
I mean u can add some other feeling which fit with ur poem
such admiring , missing , remembering and so on
P.S. that is my won opinion not the literary one
but in


its you are not your
thats it
and I like it go on smack

Admiring, missing, remembering
Really sweet words
And I will put it next poem
I really thanksss

[Miss-Thought]

posting your poem here was your choice
so you have to listen to my lovely voice
how sweeter can these words become
if you took sunlight's advice
now you are at home
drinking " red bull" with no ice
saying there are no mistakes
but sorry my friend! you are wrong!l
there are a couple of mistakes I found
but well done! you are not afraid of mistakes
cos poetry is like any other form of art
with practice it grows more profound
in fact
I like your poem.... your beautifully song
cos it is not about chemistry
it's a hit of physics and biology
it's really an unique poetry
that what I feel and I think it's real
lol, I'm kidding please don't get me wrong
keep on writing, bro,that will keep you strong

[smack]

posting your poem here was your choice
so you have to listen to my lovely voice
how sweeter can these words become
if you took sunlight's advice
now you are at home
drinking " red bull" with no ice
saying there are no mistakes
but sorry my friend! you are wrong!l
there are a couple of mistakes I found
but well done! you are not afraid of mistakes
cos poetry is like any other form of art
with practice it grows more profound
in fact
I like your poem.... your beautifully song
cos it is not about chemistry
it's a hit of physics and biology
it's really an unique poetry
that what I feel and I think it's real
lol, I'm kidding please don't get me wrong
keep on writing, bro,that will keep you strong

Actually you are right
And I will considered on my sensitive without listening to anyone
Hahahahahahahah
And really thanks for you
You give me a power to put more
Really thanks
And I will put third poem next
Sincerely
Smack